Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! Every Sunday wonderful authors post eight to ten sentences of their work. Please show some love by following the links and reading. Comments are always appreciated. In my snippet today, Beth begins to tell George why she is visiting.
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George
offered Beth one of the big winged chairs in his lounge to sit on.
Then he sat down in a chair opposite, saying, “When you're ready,
there's no hurry.” He gave her hand a gentle, reassuring pat, then
sat silent. Time had taught him to let people speak in their own time
when something was up. Finally, after wiping a few silent tears away,
Beth looked up at George, took a breath and through shaky words,
began to speak.
“Thank
you for seeing me, after all it's been so long, and first of all let
me apologize on Jake's behalf for what happened at Grace's funeral.”
George
nodded slowly, then smiled and thanked her.
“I
know you two haven't spoken for a while, but Jake's been acting
strange lately, and we're usually very close. I think he's having an
affair.”
Ooooh! Intriguing set up, Naomi! But you'd better change that "there" to "their" or the grammar police will get you.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comment and heads up about my spelling error which I have corrected
DeleteOh no! It's no wonder Grace is upset. I hope that is not the case, and that George is able to help her somehow. Nice snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks Jessica. Beth has more to speak about. Find out next week
ReplyDeleteAn affair! A woman's worst fear. Good snippet, Naomi.
ReplyDeleteThanks Charmaine
DeletePoor Beth. What an awful suspicion. Good snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks Diane
DeleteOh, no, what a terrible thing to worry over--and I can feel her worry very clearly here. I wonder what made her suspicious, and if there's another explanation.
ReplyDeleteThanks Caitlin
DeleteLots of emotion in the scene, really enjoyed the snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks Veronica
DeleteThat last line is never a good thing to say. Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteThanks Victoria
DeleteI'm intrigued to know more. Great hook.
ReplyDeleteGood action to get people to speak is to remain silent, and they will want to fill the gap. I believe that is a recognised interview technique. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks Rachel
DeleteHe seems wise. Experience does teach us to let people speak in their own time. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteThanks Teresa
DeleteI wonder what happened at the funeral? Nice that she can trust this father like this. Maybe he's a little more trustworthy than his son?
ReplyDeleteThanks Alexis. The funeral is for a different snippet
DeleteGah! Not good! Looking forward to hearing more though!
ReplyDeleteBy not good I mean the situation your characters are in, not your writing. Your writing is great! :)
DeleteThanks Amy
DeleteThere's more for Beth to talk about
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