Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! Every Sunday wonderful authors post eight to ten sentences of their work. Please show some love by following the links and reading. Comments are always appreciated. My clip this week carries on from last week.
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George
bent down as quick as his aching knees let him, and picked up the
photograph. “What a pretty little girl,” he said, handing it back
to Beth. “She has a twinkle in her eye that reminds me so much of
Grace.
Beth
smiled down with affection at the picture. “Thank you, yes she is very
pretty, and such a sweet child. Her name is Chloe, and she's just
three years old. She's your Grandaughter.”
George,
doing a quick mental calculation said, “That would mean ...”
“Yes, you're right,
I was pregnant at the funeral, but Jake wouldn't let me tell you, no
matter how much I wanted to.”
Interesting family dynamics at work here! Enjoyed the snippet...
ReplyDeleteThanks Veronica
DeleteLove a good family secret! Good job on execution with that family interaction.
ReplyDeleteHistory Sleuth's Mysteries
Thanks Cindy
DeleteSo smooth and touching. Good writing, Naomi
ReplyDeleteThanks Charmaine
DeleteOh, this is heartbreaking! I wonder what happened between father and son?
ReplyDeleteThanks Christina
DeleteThe plot thickens. Looking forward to more!
ReplyDeleteThanks Angelica
DeleteOh, that is so very sad. I'm glad he at least knows now. Enjoying this story! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Jessica
DeleteThis snippet fairly bubbles with emotional conflicts and possible repercussions.
ReplyDeleteThanks Ed
DeleteI can just imagine what he's feeling. How devastating yet a chance for redemption? I assume the funeral was his son's? (sorry, if this was already made clear)
ReplyDeleteThe funeral was George's wife, Grace. Thanks for commenting Diane
DeleteShe's the only one who knows the right thing to do for her marriage but... no matter how much her husband didn't want her too, I think she should have told her father-in-law about his coming grandchild!
ReplyDeleteWe learn why she couldn't in a different part of the story. Thanks for your comment Caitlin
DeleteI wonder why Jake wouldn't want his father to know? Interesting family dynamics indeed!
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting Alexis
DeleteWhy wouldn't Jake let her tell him? This is interesting...
ReplyDeleteThanks Amy
DeleteNow everyone wants to know why Jake wouldn't let her tell. Nice tease.
ReplyDeleteThanks Elaine
DeleteFamily dynamics make for some great material material. You've done an excellent job of getting the reader's attention with this snippet!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Teresa
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