Saturday, 22 October 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors ~ 23 October 2016: The Locket




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 This week I have another snippet from my WIP The Locket. While Jake is away at his conference, his widowed father has an unexpected visitor.






George shuffled, heavy footed in his worn out old slippers to the front door. On the doorstep, stood a woman in her latter twenties, of medium height, with soft dark curls that tumbled down over the shoulders of her white Macintosh. George recognized her immediately as Beth, the wife of his son, Jake. He could tell something was wrong, however; the usual sparkling blue eyes seemed to be fighting back tears, and her full pink lips had a tremble in them.

Hello George,” she finally managed to mumble. I hope you don’t mind me calling unannounced. I didn't know who else to turn to”

“Well, I must admit, you're the last person I expected to see, but you had better come in." He smiled and ushered Beth inside.


34 comments:

  1. Oh no. Why is she so upset? Great snippet.

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  2. Sounds like she's about to bring some bad news. I wonder what it is?

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    1. Thanks for dropping by. More next week

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  3. Nice snippet cliffhanger! Did hubby cheat? Did he get hurt? Why do to the dad? Well done.

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  4. Julie Evelyn Joyce23 October 2016 at 14:11

    Nice set-up here! I look forward to reading more next week! :)

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  5. Very clever hook, Naomi. We are agog, to find out what has brought Beth to George's door like that!

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  6. Oh gosh! I'm curious to know what happened. Very intriguing!

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  7. Wonder what brought her to his door... interesting!

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  8. I seem to remember Jake was getting into trouble last week. Did his wife find out? Nice suspense in this snippet.

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  9. Poignant scene. What trouble is brewing?
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  10. Right away the reader feel compassion for her. You paint a vivid picture of the older man shuffling in his slippers and the daughter-in -law in trouble.

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  11. Great snippet. I will now have to find out what has brought her to her father-in-law's door, seeking help.

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  12. Intriguing beginning and now I'm on the edge of my chair wondering what's wrong, so that's an effective excerpt for sure!

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  13. Probably not good news. Intrigued to know.

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    1. All will be revealed soon. Thanks for commenting Karen

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  14. Jake is away, so he might not be the source of the problem... or maybe he is. So many possibilities, none of them good. I hope he can help, she seems quite upset!

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  15. She's unexpected and upset. This doesn't bode well for Jake, I think. Gives a great sense of foreboding. Great job!

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  16. Oh, interesting way to meet daddy. How intriguing! Of course we want to know what is so wrong she just shows up on her father-in-law's doorstep uninvited, and alone...

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  17. Thanks for dropping by, reading and commenting. More next week

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