Sunday, 30 October 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors ~ 30 October 2016: The Locket


Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! Every Sunday wonderful authors post eight to ten  sentences of their work. Please show some love by following the links and reading. Comments are always appreciated.  In my snippet today, Beth begins to tell George why she is visiting.

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George offered Beth one of the big winged chairs in his lounge to sit on. Then he sat down in a chair opposite, saying, “When you're ready, there's no hurry.” He gave her hand a gentle, reassuring pat, then sat silent. Time had taught him to let people speak in their own time when something was up. Finally, after wiping a few silent tears away, Beth looked up at George, took a breath and through shaky words, began to speak.

Thank you for seeing me, after all it's been so long, and first of all let me apologize on Jake's behalf for what happened at Grace's funeral.”

George nodded slowly, then smiled and thanked her.

I know you two haven't spoken for a while, but Jake's been acting strange lately, and we're usually very close. I think he's having an affair.”


26 comments:

  1. Ooooh! Intriguing set up, Naomi! But you'd better change that "there" to "their" or the grammar police will get you.

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    1. Thanks for your comment and heads up about my spelling error which I have corrected

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  2. Oh no! It's no wonder Grace is upset. I hope that is not the case, and that George is able to help her somehow. Nice snippet!

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  3. Thanks Jessica. Beth has more to speak about. Find out next week

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  4. An affair! A woman's worst fear. Good snippet, Naomi.

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  5. Poor Beth. What an awful suspicion. Good snippet.

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  6. Oh, no, what a terrible thing to worry over--and I can feel her worry very clearly here. I wonder what made her suspicious, and if there's another explanation.

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  7. Lots of emotion in the scene, really enjoyed the snippet.

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  8. That last line is never a good thing to say. Tweeted.

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  9. I'm intrigued to know more. Great hook.

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  10. Good action to get people to speak is to remain silent, and they will want to fill the gap. I believe that is a recognised interview technique. Great snippet.

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  11. He seems wise. Experience does teach us to let people speak in their own time. Nicely done!

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  12. I wonder what happened at the funeral? Nice that she can trust this father like this. Maybe he's a little more trustworthy than his son?

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    1. Thanks Alexis. The funeral is for a different snippet

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  13. Gah! Not good! Looking forward to hearing more though!

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    1. By not good I mean the situation your characters are in, not your writing. Your writing is great! :)

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    2. There's more for Beth to talk about

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