Friday 22 June 2012

Flash Fiction Friday - 22 June: Winter

Well it's Friday again. That wonderful time of the week when a bunch of talented writers get together and post 100 word flash fiction inspired by a given picture. All well worth a read and comment so pull up a chair, click the link to the other Awesome Writers

My contribution this week is called Winter  Hope you enjoy it and leave me a comment



Astral crouched on the ground and sobbed, oblivious to the snow underfoot. That could not compare to the icicle which pierced her heart the day Cadence went away.  Every day she watched in vain for him to return. She realized now he would never come back for her. She remembered how the elders took her wings and banished Cadence.

Astral always knew the raven would never allow her freedom. He watched over like a jailer.

After many years, her wings had grown again but this time black.  A mark of the unworthy.

Astral knew life was forever winter without Cadence. 
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10 comments:

  1. forever winter, the final pow to the chest, nice! Oh, and "...mark of the unworthy" very nice! Loved it.

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  2. Ooh. Her pain is so palpable. Very good.

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  3. Wow! How sad. Forever winter, never to feel the warmth of the summer sun delicately kissing her skin? That sucks. Brilliant post.

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  4. Forever is a long time with indefinite measure .....
    ( jose luis ,,,,facebook )

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  5. Very nice use of the image and fixing on the pain in the gloom of winter forever locked me in.

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  6. Loved the last line!! Fabulous Flasher.

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  7. This is the first time I'm checking out everyone's Flash Friday posts. I love the different takes on the picture.

    Enjoyed yours Naomi. Heartfelt. I could feel her pain at losing Cadence.

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  8. Truly lovely post. So sad, so beautiful.

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  9. I loved your take on the FFF photo. Fantastic.

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  10. ooh, sad but touching post. Love this FFF

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