Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! Every Sunday wonderful authors post eight to ten sentences of their work. Please show some love by following the links and reading. Comments are always appreciated. My snippet this week carries on my WIP, The Locket with a bit more from George and Beth.
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George
sighed, and sank heavily into a chair opposite Beth. He shook his
head slowly, scratched it, however his few remaining white hairs
barely moved. Finally, he said, “She looks lovely. Oh Jake, Jake,
you're my son and I feel so responsible for our rift. Why didn't we
put our differences behind us? I hope it's not too late.” Then he
smiled up at Beth who seemed to be searching in her purse for
something.
She
handed him a two small pictures of her daughter. “Here, you can keep these, and I
will bring Chloe here to meet you very soon.”
“That
would be wonderful, thank you, but pick your time wisely, don't upset Jake.”
That final line, along with the fact that it was Beth and not Jake who reacted, really makes me wonder what he thinks of this scene.
ReplyDeleteAll will become clear. Thanks for your comment Ed
ReplyDelete"Don't upset Jake"
ReplyDeleteThat is an interesting thing to say. Nice hook, Naomi, I am dying to know more.
Thanks Kim
Delete"Don't upset Jake"
ReplyDeleteThat is an interesting thing to say. Nice hook, Naomi, I am dying to know more.
More soon
DeleteI'm intrigued by that final line too. Looking forward to reading more and learning more about these characters. Great work, Naomi!
ReplyDeleteThanks Julie
DeleteThat last line really made me wonder as to the nature of their disagreement!
ReplyDeleteThanks Christina
DeleteI wonder what it would take to upset Jake... ;)
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting Amy
DeleteVery emotional and well portrayed.
ReplyDeleteThanks Angelica
DeleteFamilies are always difficult. So what's with Jake? Is he beyond help with so much going for him?
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comment Charmaine
DeleteThese snippets are painting an interesting picture of Jake without ever bringing him into the story. I'm curious as to how it will all work out.
ReplyDeleteThere's quite a lot going on in this story. Thanks for your comment Jessica
DeleteLike the others, I'm wondering about Jake. My first thought was why not upset Jake. Maybe he needs a kick in the pants. But then I wondered why his father was so concerned about not upsetting Jake. Great job on making me want to read more.
ReplyDeleteLooking forward to reading more of this story. Intriguing snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks Rachel
DeleteMaybe Jake needs to be upset a little. Or maybe Jake needs to stop being so upset over everything...
ReplyDeleteThanks Caitlin
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