Tuesday 26 February 2013

Tantalizing Tuesday - 26 February: The Grave

Well it's Tuesday again, so that means time for tantalizing teasers. A group of awesome writers write a two hundred word teaser inspired by their own choice of picture. Please show them some love by clicking the link to get to each and read. All comments greatly appreciated as always. This week I have something a little different for you. I called it The Grave. Enjoy
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The aged gardener trudged around the old churchyard. Riddled with arthritis, the ground felt hard beneath his feet. I am too old for this he thought, struggling to pull weeds from the dirt. Nobody visits this decrepit church. 


 Shuffling around to the rear of the church where the older graves were, the gardener suddenly came to a halt. In front of an old crumbling gravestone, covered in green lichen rendering the inscription virtually indistinguishable, was a blonde woman. Dressed in a long dark gown and black boots she sat silent.

She seemed so deep in thought the gardener stayed still, not wanting to disturb her. However when he moved forward accidentally stepped on a twig, the crack cutting the silence.

Yet she never looked up, so stooping to get the twig the gardener could not resist speaking. “You look deep in thought,” he said. “Did you know them well?”

“You could say that,” she replied in a strange, faraway voice. “She died tragically.”

 “Who was she?” His curiosity was growing.

“Me.”

Looking up she had disappeared. 


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13 comments:

  1. Definitely sent chills up my spine. Great hook.

    Dakota

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  2. FANTASTIC. Absolutely loved this tease and the image was perfect for your words

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  3. intriguing idea, curious to find out more about the ghost lady.

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  4. You wrote a thrilling tale of this woman's death. I wish I could have read his reaction. Well done.

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  5. Oh scary! Didn't see it coming until the very end! Fun and spooky post!

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  6. Yes, yes, yes! I want her whole story, but you wrapped it up so tightly in this Flash package. PERFECT!

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  7. Wow, that was good and the ending was perfect - I didn't see it coming. This is another flash that begs to be turned into a larger story, so many possibilities. How did she die, is there some unfinished business she must attend to before she can finally rest in peace?

    Bravo, well done.

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  8. Wow, what a twist Naomi. It was something that left me puzzled. How did she died and what happened? Kind of makes me curious to read the rest. Nice post!

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  9. Oooh, I got the chills now. Fab teaser!

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  10. Loved this teaser. It's spine chilling. I hope there will be more where this came from. Great work.

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  11. Loved this! Please continue it!

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  12. Outstanding, Naomi! That definitely deserves expansion. I did so love this teaser..........and it begs for more, more.....MORE!!!:) xo

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