Sunday 13 November 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors ~ 13 November 2016: The Locket


Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! Every Sunday wonderful authors post eight to ten  sentences of their work. Please show some love by following the links and reading. Comments are always appreciated.  My clip this week carries on from last week.

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George bent down as quick as his aching knees let him, and picked up the photograph. “What a pretty little girl,” he said, handing it back to Beth. “She has a twinkle in her eye that reminds me so much of Grace.

Beth smiled down with affection at the picture. “Thank you, yes she is very pretty, and such a sweet child. Her name is Chloe, and she's just three years old. She's your Grandaughter.”

George, doing a quick mental calculation said, “That would mean ...”

Yes, you're right, I was pregnant at the funeral, but Jake wouldn't let me tell you, no matter how much I wanted to.”


26 comments:

  1. Interesting family dynamics at work here! Enjoyed the snippet...

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  2. Love a good family secret! Good job on execution with that family interaction.

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  3. So smooth and touching. Good writing, Naomi

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  4. Oh, this is heartbreaking! I wonder what happened between father and son?

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  5. The plot thickens. Looking forward to more!

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  6. Oh, that is so very sad. I'm glad he at least knows now. Enjoying this story! :)

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  7. This snippet fairly bubbles with emotional conflicts and possible repercussions.

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  8. I can just imagine what he's feeling. How devastating yet a chance for redemption? I assume the funeral was his son's? (sorry, if this was already made clear)

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    1. The funeral was George's wife, Grace. Thanks for commenting Diane

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  9. She's the only one who knows the right thing to do for her marriage but... no matter how much her husband didn't want her too, I think she should have told her father-in-law about his coming grandchild!

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    1. We learn why she couldn't in a different part of the story. Thanks for your comment Caitlin

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  10. I wonder why Jake wouldn't want his father to know? Interesting family dynamics indeed!

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  11. Why wouldn't Jake let her tell him? This is interesting...

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  12. Now everyone wants to know why Jake wouldn't let her tell. Nice tease.

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  13. Family dynamics make for some great material material. You've done an excellent job of getting the reader's attention with this snippet!

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